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The overarching story picks up here, so if you haven't read the first two, it might not make as much sense.

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THE GAME HAS CHANGED ♪ by Daft Punk.

So this part of Jack's overarching story has been sitting in my skull since July, so I've had plenty of time to come to hate it, but I'm excited for what it'll open up! New application will be uploaded after judging.
I have to thank ~tttwigs for putting up with me crying on the floor every time I had this round open. <3

Epilogue:

Features
Jeremy 'Jack' Cantobre: couldhavebeenking.deviantart.c…
Thistle Baines: fav.me/d548sse

Charles Wortfauls: fav.me/d544csk
Jin LeAirra: fav.me/d55fvoo
Amelia Butler: fav.me/d53n4n3

Sheriff Eleanor Oakley: couldhavebeenking.deviantart.c…
Maria Oakley: Deceased.
Steven Krigler: couldhavebeenking.deviantart.c…


Textures: d241yswl6yg9sc.cloudfront.net/…

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:iconmariedubois:
MarieDubois Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
Well at the very least Miss Mary had guts.
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013
Yes, yes she did :D
Thanks for the faves! <3
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fauxlyn Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013
This is going to be sort of a collective comment on Jack and all the entries but anyway...let me start off by saying I rarely like 'bad boy'/criminal/outlaw characters. Not because of character 'vocation' itself but rather because they always seem to fall into two tropes: the straight up evil guy that can't seem to socialize normally in public without screaming "I'M A SERIAL KILLER" through their attitude or the guy that's just shown to be misunderstood and/or is completely redeemed and changed by tru luv in the end...despite the whole y'know, killing people thing~

However there's a few stories I've read where that managed to capture a very detestable, very morally questionable crook mentality but still made very likable characters and this is hands down one of them! :D I ADORE JACK. And I adore your comics.

The detailing on the background and sandstorm is wonderful; I know how easy it is to try to take shortcuts with the art and I see none of that here. There has been a significant improvement in the consistency and art in general from the first comic to this one. The whole battle scene was gorgeouss. As far as the storytelling, while I was intrigued by Jack initially...now I'm REALLY wondering what will come from this latest plot development with the kid. :'D Aaah Jack Jr is such a cutie!

Keep up the good work and best of luck in judging!!
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013
But tru wub conquers all, Faux!
I am indescribably happy that you love Jack's character. One of my biggest concerns was trying to make him a likeable character without getting all "boohoo, gimme sympathy". It's something that's concerned me quite a bit :'D since I need people to emphasize with Jack, so I am glad you like him! Honestly though, I'm so, so glad!

;u; Aaaaaah! I could hug you for your wonderfully kind words! Thank you!
I am excited to play with the relationship dynamics with Jack and Jack Jr :'D

Thank you thank you thank you! Honestly ;u; for the lovely comment and the fave! Best of luck to you too! <3
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Flyka-8D Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist
I have one question:


ARE YOU ONE WITH NATURE?

I can't, I just-- I just replay it and replay. I keep rolling on my chair from laughing XD I really love the style you use to make your comics, it fits western theme so well! And those backgrounds, oh man!
You captured my characters' personality so well andOHMYGODCHUCKLOOKSSOAWESOMEHERE!! Jack has some real bad luck, I mean, a kid shows up out of nowhere and then it turns out he's partner is a kid, too. Also his opponents. Kids. Kids everywhere. Jack, you're old.
Jack, what are you going to do now?
NOW THAT THE GAME HAS CHANGED? *gets shot*
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013
I am so happy you like it! And I am glad I got Charles right! I was really worried I'd messed his personality wrong! ;o; I know I underplayed Chuck's fear and got his scarring wrong (a lot), sorry about that! :C
KIDS EVERYWHERE :'D Jack is as old as balls All these youths :'D teeheee
I am really glad you enjoyed it though, really! Thank you for the fave <3
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Flyka-8D Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist
He's perfect! Chuck is perfect too! Seriously, he can be scared less of Roland, because he didn't have to actually fight him xD (I ablosutley love how Roland snotred at Chuck just to freak him out xD Priceless~!) And don't worry about the scarring. I remember how much pain it was for me back in R2. The most important thing is that he HAS scars, so its okay to mess them up xD
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013
This makes me very happy ;u; thank you <3 I am just very glad you enjoyed it <3
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ChelseaDanger Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Another great edition to Jack's story, a game changer indeed! It's a shame Mary died, she seems like a feisty gal aha. Very curious to see where the story goes and my heart aches for poor younger Jack for wanting to be close to his father, yet it's probably not in his best interest (good thing Thistle is there to look after him at least). Yes, very interested to see Jack's next move. ouo
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013
Who knows! Maybe I will flashback some Mary :'D everyone seems to like her character based on a single letter, so maybe I'll please the readers!
It's a very good thing Thistle is there, or poor Jackie would be back in the dirt by now :'D I'm really,really happy you took the time to read AND to comment! You've made me a happy chappy, Chels! Thank you ;u; <3
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ChelseaDanger Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, that'd be great to see a flashback of Mary! It'd be interesting to see how she went from loving Jack to hating every fiber of her being aha.

I'm really really happy that you took the time, effort and put a ton of hand work into bringing your stories to life so I could read them! I adore the character and stories you write, I know I'm always in for a good read and I adore seeing your skills as a story-teller and artist progress. And I'm always happy to make a friend happy too. ;w; <3
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013
hgjdgkjfdg I want to do this now :'D I'll see how the future rounds plan out! If not, I can at least do a side thing :'D

;u; let me hold you, you precious girl ;o; <333
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ChelseaDanger Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh side things are always good! *u* When do you find out the results of this round btw?

Awww, let me hold you as well. ;u; <333
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013
I'm doing a side thing now :'D not related to Mary tho :C hoping I'll finish it today or tomorrow!
And we have no idea, they needed 4/8 entries per faction, but one faction only submitted 2 completed entries, so the mods are deciding if they're going to drop a round or do something else. So no idea! Tbh, I don't mind the break? :'D

-holds- ;; <333
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deedledove Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013   Digital Artist
Oh man...those landscapes~ I smiled when I saw the full one >w<
Hee hee, but yes! The art was beautiful, I love your coloring style in these, it gives it that nice western feel. And yay friendship! Also Charlie and Jack had great dynamics I can ship it |D And the way you drew the attacks were also very nice, like that water, oh my gosh, wonderful. All in all great entry! =D
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013
I'm really glad you enjoyed the entry! It really means a lot, and especially that you got a western feel from it!
I really enjoyed drawing that water panel, though it took a while, it was definitely worth it :D
Thanks for the comment and the fave!

How's your entry going?
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deedledove Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013   Digital Artist
Hee hee you're welcome! =D

It's going good I guess, I have the 1st page pretty much done TvT School has been so killer this semester I'm scared I might not get done in time, but I'll do my best for you guys~
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013
Ouch for killer school! Best of luck to you! <3
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SnowKuki Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh gosh~! This was awesome to read!! Suddenly, an illegitimate child appears! >w< More background for Jack, how cool is that!! Seriously, though, the battle was pretty cool! I was caught off guard when Roland attacked Chuck, haha. Jack and Chalrie's battle-relationship was pretty funny. XD Amelia looks great as well! (I still love that 'TEAMWORK' panel.) Fantastic entry~!! :D
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
I had a lot of fun drawing Amelia, I really like her design! I'm sorry I couldn't include her and Jin more, but the comic is 30 pages long ;; so yeah :C but I really enjoyed drawing and writing her!
Thanks for the fave <3
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ninemore Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Filmographer
WOAH NICE YOU'RE DONE! :'DD
this is awesome King! I really enjoyed reading this and I love where the story is heading-- wish you the best man! :D
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013
hgngngnggg ;u;! Thanks buddy :D I'm glad you enjoyed reading it! Double thanks for the fave!

Are you entering this round?
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ninemore Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Student Filmographer
ahahah no problem! :D

yep! hopefully I'm able to submit it this weekend! ;v;
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
<3!

Heeee! I am excited to see :D best of luck to you!
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Akaikane Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
This was a great read! I loved the characterization and the attention to detail you paid not only to the individual panels themselves, but also to Jack's backstory. Thanks for the great read. I wish you the best in judging. :>
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
Thank you ever so much! Makes my day to hear you enjoyed reading it and enjoyed the characters :D and thank you for the best wishes! All the thank yous! And another for the fave <3
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Akaikane Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013
Really, the favorite and the comments were well-deserved on your end. I still enjoy flipping through this, even though a few days have passed. :'D
Thank you kindly for your well-wishes. We shall see what happens when judging comes around. <3
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tttwigs Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Professional Writer
Oh where do I begin on how wonderful this entry is? Rach you have continued to push yourself with every round and watching the art mature is just a pleasure. However what really holds my attention is your story. You are a master storyteller. You give the reader enough information and allow them to fill in the blanks--you put forth complex, problematic characters who are interesting and make the reader sympathize (while being revolted by them at the same time). While the battle is the point of the tournament, the frame of the story is what carries interest on from round to round, and you really hit that nail on the head. Jack is a fascinating character, and this twist only adds to it.
<3 I am so glad to see this done, and to get to enjoy it in its entirety. Really, chica--you outdid yourself.
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
Hnnggg, being called a master storyteller from you is a compliment I will cherish ;u; Idhjkdfhdf just thank you for such lovely words! Honestly <3 and thank you so so so so much for encouraging me through this round when I just wanted to give up ;u; thank you!
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Limeknight Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Rach

RACH

You crazy woman you. :'D This turned out incredible and oh my god this story. You've yet again outdone yourself and it's great to see how you've improved while drawing this entry, I'm so proud of you. <3

Also: GODDAMMIT JACK YOU'RE SUCH A BUTTFACE :U
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
-sobs and touches your butt-

Thank you Tommy! And thank you for pushing me on at the end when I wanted to hedgehog on the floor. :'D

JACK'S NOT A BUTTFACE :B EVERYONE ELSE IS A BUTTFACE. JACK IS AN ANGELLLLL~
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studiofruke Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Digital Artist
wow i realized that comment really sucked, so here's a better one.

I love how much characterization and plot you get into just a few panels, and your rendering of the sandstorm is wonderful, and I love how sassy jack is.
and dare i say it, i can imagine him actually being handsome at one point
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
Hnggg thank you ;u; this really makes me happy to hear! Thankyouthankyou <3
Sassy Jack just makes me happy, he was never meant to be sassy :'D

Oh man, did you miss the post? My friend found someone and was all "this is younger Jack" and I accepted it without question :'D
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studiofruke Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Digital Artist
oh no he's hot

rach what do i do
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
welcome to hell :'D
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studiofruke Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Digital Artist
omg rach this is incredible

I do believe I was grinning through the entirety of the round this was wonderful
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
This is not a sucky comment, it made me grin to know you enjoyed it ;u; so thank you <3
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AshenBones Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Once again a fan-fucking-tastic round performed by you! I enjoyed it.
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couldhavebeenking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
Heehee! Thank you very much :D I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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AshenBones Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Always. :iconglompplz:
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